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Nasal Fluid

Us humans The dumbest and most genial creatures on Earth Having eaten from the forbidden tree of knowledge I could quite easily write a work of genius Or likewise perform the dumbest act of all Yes - I could sit here and imagine that I could do both in fact Already enacted one super successfully The other there is still to do But lifes a ***** I am not saying which The knowledge hangs there in mid air Like nasal fluid urgently needing to reverse so... ( sniff)

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Jannie Breedt

Date: 2/6/2017 2:51:00 AM

Well its my antidote for writing too much flowery stuff I guess. Nice and gross

Caycay Jennings

Date: 2/4/2017 5:34:00 PM

And so sit the scales that can and do dip both ways. Love the analogy. Gross ending, you!, but effective. Feeling flippant lately, aren't cha? Hugs ... CayCay

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 1/30/2017 3:13:00 AM

Jannie, do correct me if am wrong... limerick maybe is not the right form for this.. or maybe limericks can also be written as like this? however, the poem's message is a remarkable.. :) have a pleasant day, Olive Eloisa :)

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/30/2017 4:58:00 AM

You are absoluetely right Olive. So happy that you stopped by and also for Matters of the Heart. You guys look so happy on your avatar

Ahmed Sheik Koya

Date: 1/23/2017 4:16:00 PM

Lol. You are right Jannie and well put. We are such a contradiction. We failed to recognize our creator and crucified Him. I am so glad that Gods love is unconditional.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/25/2017 4:42:00 AM

Hi Ahmed, are you well? Ty for commenting. Yes we are extremely capable of fantastic acts of faith and degradation .