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Ticked Off

Fast-handed Harry was a renowned pick-pocket He could grab a wallet with the speed of a rocket. One day while doing some picking A suicide bomber’s bomb was ticking. Where once was Harry there’s now a socket.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/3/2015 10:24:00 PM

oh MY, poor poor GUY!!! I enjoyed this.

Paul Schneiter
Date: 6/3/2015 10:29:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate your sweet generosity and thoughtfulness.

Skat A

Date: 6/3/2015 9:35:00 PM

Paul. Not cool...but good limerick

Paul Schneiter
Date: 6/3/2015 9:44:00 PM

SKAT A, you're right; I shouldn't be writing about bombers of any kind. Apologies to anyone who took offense. As for the limerick itself, I think it's marginal at best. The last line exhibits forced rhyming. I must have been drinking too much Dr. Pepper.

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/3/2015 7:14:00 PM

G'day Paul... I dare say the suicide bomber was quite relieved - thank you Paul - Lindsay

Paul Schneiter
Date: 6/3/2015 10:07:00 PM

Lindsay, I dare say you are correct. Thank you for responding. * * * Apologies to you and Lyric Man for misplacing my responses. Blame it on the wages of age.

Paul Schneiter
Date: 6/3/2015 9:38:00 PM

I knew I should have taken that Chinese philosophy course. No matter; your analysis makes perfect sense to me. Thank you.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/3/2015 3:50:00 PM

Guess he learned to keep his hands to himself the hard way

Paul Schneiter
Date: 6/3/2015 10:09:00 PM

Yes, and it was a one-time lesson. Thanks for commenting, Tim (still chuckling about "Onion Breath").

Jan Allison

Date: 6/3/2015 2:24:00 PM

guess he got his just rewards then Paul:-) Hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/4/2015 1:22:00 AM

Paul some poems I can rattle off very quickly especially humourous ones, but some especially contest can take me about several days especially if i am not au fait with the form especially where special meter is required which i struggle with - I like to stop and start again when the inspiration hits - this one I wrote over a bout 3 days - but I was so pleased with the way it turned out. Hugs Jan xx http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/sensational_summer_sky___visual_2_677771

Paul Schneiter
Date: 6/3/2015 10:21:00 PM

Thanks, Jan. I tried to make the justice poetic, but--truth to tell--it turned out to be a mediocre effort. I should have given it an overnight rest, then trashed it. Sometimes we try to wish our writing into being acceptable, as if by sheer force of will we can fix it. I can't imagine, though, that happening to you.