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There Was Once

There was once a young dancer Who was recovering from cancer She wanted fame but her leg was lame So people called her a prancer. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ I know it's really mean and sad but I had this as homework and I honestly couldn't think of rhyming words and than I just thought of this.

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Beata Agustin

Date: 2/7/2024 7:43:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/28/2016 1:16:00 PM

secrets, enjoyed reading your poem, Please keep writing and sharing your poetry. XOX -- LINDA --

Skat A

Date: 9/9/2015 3:02:00 PM

Secrets, thank you for sharing. A pleasure to read... SKAT

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 12/27/2014 6:44:00 AM

Oh poor poor dancer, yeah dancing must be hard on our skeletal system, our clavicles, bones. I hav read of many dancers who damage like that. U rhymed it in a super cool way, sad n humoured in a gud way. Mery xmas

Charlene Mccutcheon

Date: 11/7/2014 8:50:00 PM

I really liked your limerick. Yes sad yet funny too. Thanks for sharing your talent. And thank you for visiting my poem "Bucket Full of Love" and leaving a kind comment. Love, Charlene

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 9/22/2014 6:29:00 AM

really beautifully penned

Secrets Inyoureyes
Date: 9/22/2014 6:37:00 AM

Thank you :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/14/2014 11:11:00 PM

you could say in the last line: so instead, she became a prancer! To me, that would make it a wee bit funnier!! Cute idea.

James Fraser

Date: 9/1/2014 3:14:00 PM

Well done Talicia, and we know this funny/sad Limerick isn't meant to offend. Good luck with your homework. Thank you kindly for visiting my page, James :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/1/2014 9:30:00 AM

Sad..Sometimes our dreams just don't come true..Enjoyed reading this emotive and inspiring work..Sara

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 8/31/2014 4:12:00 AM

Nice write Talicia. Verlena

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/30/2014 12:42:00 AM

Hi, Talicia, you have to write a sad poem. :) If you want to surprise me.... Linda

Secrets Inyoureyes
Date: 8/30/2014 12:43:00 AM

Alright, thanks

Tim Smith

Date: 8/24/2014 9:17:00 AM

You need one more syllable in line three...you might say "she wanted some fame"....to make it not as mean...you could do line two "Recovering from cancer".......hugs Tim

Secrets Inyoureyes
Date: 8/30/2014 12:44:00 AM

Thanks I might just do that

Jan Allison

Date: 8/24/2014 8:21:00 AM

I would love to see the final line end in chancer and be positive about what she is doing on the lines of 'admire her shes a chancer' I will say no more it is too close to home:-( Hugs jan xx

Secrets Inyoureyes
Date: 9/22/2014 5:54:00 AM

Oh, I'm so sorry for your husband and father and for your hardships. I will try to change it I'm just not sure how.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/30/2014 4:51:00 AM

I do hope you do I found this poem very difficult to read as a limerick is a humourous poem - my husband has had cancer my father is dying from cancer so it would be good if you can turn it into a positive poem

Secrets Inyoureyes
Date: 8/30/2014 12:45:00 AM

Yeah that is a good idea

Princess Xia

Date: 8/24/2014 8:07:00 AM

I laughed a bit, and felt bad a bit. But it is turning a bad situation into and all right one!

Secrets Inyoureyes
Date: 8/24/2014 8:10:00 AM

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/24/2014 6:59:00 AM

I chuckled at this :) um you should seperate the fame, lame, line so its five lines. but your rhymes are go and great flow :) hope you get a good grade ;)

Casarah Nance
Date: 8/24/2014 7:23:00 AM

looks good :) hugs

Secrets Inyoureyes
Date: 8/24/2014 7:02:00 AM

Thanks for the advice and kind comment. :)