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A Distempered Horse

There once was a skinny horse name George. Poor ole soul lived alone in a gorge. Three fit sheep came his way. They were traded that day. Matted, bony, his belly engorged. Onward He forged, living on the brink. I’ll save him, one young maiden did think. Head hung; life was his game. George, his infamous name. She prayed; from his needs, she did not shrink. George would not drink; lips were cracked and dry. She asked God, “Please don’t let him die.” Water was his kismet. Sweet feed filled hope’s bucket. She cut out mats; whisked away each fly. Six months later, George was still alive. Lips were moist; he ate; began to thrive. With some flesh on his bones, And relieved of his groans, The day of her moving would arrive. The time came when George had to be sold. Half Arabian, not very old Registration papers. The old trader’s capers, You promised them, the young girl cajoled. How could he live; does he have luster? Papers lost; no death by distemper. Confessions on that day, The girl went away. Compassion to the horse did whisper. New owners bought him, his health still poor. His price and potential was the big lure. They quickly changed his name. Greener pastures, the game. Star’s beauty became his life’s encore. © June 7, 2011 Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen Written for Poetry Soup Member Contest: A Horse Story Sponsored by: Carol Brown (Based on a true story)

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Date: 6/28/2011 1:31:00 PM
Hi Dane, Cool to see a great poem in the winner circle. Agape, Moses
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Date: 6/23/2011 8:16:00 PM
Quite a story, Dane Ann. from where is this story? maybe it could be a movie. there have b een some great ones in the past decade about famous horses! congrats on your win, dear.
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Date: 6/23/2011 4:31:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Dane Ann. Excellent piece. Nice going. xxxRalph
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Date: 6/23/2011 4:23:00 PM
Interesting story. I would love for it to have a happy ending. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/23/2011 2:22:00 PM
Nice story of love, hope and horses! Congrad's on your big win. Light & Love
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Date: 6/23/2011 1:38:00 PM
My congratulations on the win in the contest of carol, Dane
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Date: 6/23/2011 12:44:00 PM
Congrats Dane Ann on your wonderful win in the horse contest with this exciting entry .. nicely penned ..beautifully told..luv..
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Date: 6/23/2011 12:18:00 PM
Congratulations and thank you for supporting my contest Dane Ann. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/14/2011 9:18:00 AM
So many animals are neglected, Dane, and I'm not surprised this is based on a true story. Still, I kept thinking as I read it that the young maiden was "Mary" who would soon be riding horseback as she lead her flock of lambs. Great write, dear! Wishing you success in Carol's contest with this poignant yet witty poem. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/8/2011 7:01:00 AM
What a lovely creative approach to the theme of the contest, Dane
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Date: 6/8/2011 4:32:00 AM
a wonderful creative write and story for the contest Dane Ann.. good luck my friend with this special piece..luv..
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